nice,i like it.
its the good base to a song you shud loop the begining to the end up to about 27 seconds and remove the verry low bass because it clashes with the melody even wen i put it through a softwere sub sampler and run it through a sub n pod speaker arangement you shud develop on the intro part but adding a main pierceing sound because its all verry soft sounding hope i helped abit.